Day Five
Today’s Prompt: You stumble upon a random letter on the path.
I found your letter
It said “To my Love”
You spoke tender, touching, words that took my breath
You pledged your undying faithfulness
You told of how your Soul was now completed, whole
You teased and sent my blood rushing, hinting at your desire
I was overcome by your frankness
Comforted, secured by your pledge
Breathless from your familiar, frank, intimate passion
Mind racing, possibilities, new horizons opening, mind-blowing
Love thought dead now aflame in me
Rushing to the climax
The salutation was marvelous, how will she close
My Heart
My heart she said
I soared, unbelieving yet freed on my Soul’s hallelujah
She did love, I had been foolish to doubt
She did see me and I am chosen, the One
I reeled, rejoiced, and rested in the knowledge that it had all been . . .
Worth it, the doubt, the pain, the blind faith
She loves . . .
P.S. I will tell him soon. Then we can finally be together . . .
Bitch! (Writer’s Commentary)
🙂 Be Groovy!
Afterthought – Diary – Bread
This one took away my breath. That means that I am currently not breathing. Thank you so very much for reading my posts, PG.
I enjoy your work. I am glad you were here.
OMG…heart attack…that’s all….
What is plain to see, is that the one who loved her, would have given her far more in life, and within the words of the song, came the truth, I believe is that even in the reader’s own disappointment and pain, he still wished her and them the best. THAT is what a noble man is all about, and a noble man wrote this post.
You know I thank you for bringing in the guitar!
Is it ok for noble men to say bitch and remain noble 🙂
Absolutely beautifully heartbreaking …loved it:)
Plato, my heart aches. I saw where that was going and I tried so hard to make it turn out differently! I love that you read it.
I grinned with tears in my eyes reading your comment. Thank you. 🙂
Do you record for librivox?
Is that a production company?
It’s like audible for free things in the public domain. Anybody can volunteer. Us closet recorders usually end up there for some fun.
It’s like a free Audible for the public domain. Us closet VO artists end up there and have some fun. They’ve recorded most of historical English literature over there, along with many classics from other languages,
I hope she didn’t write her letter for her poetry class assignment;)
Sorry, I swore far too much for your filter. b—- or d—-…
He loved her, would he call her a bitch? Or, just say damn? Does love turn so quickly to anger or would hurt bridge the gap. Tomorrow, he might call her a bitch and for the next couple of years. Sadly.
True. He was numb with shock having been so expanded by the letter then slammed in the dirt from that great height.
https://metalflowermaker.wordpress.com/2015/04/10/the-five-stages-of-grief/
Thank you
Shorter…https://metalflowermaker.wordpress.com/2015/04/10/five-stages-of-grief-loss-of-amorous-relationship/
Bittersweet nightshade, Plato. The video was a nice touch, too.
I was looking at it a while ago. I wasn’t sure if it was clear. I wanted it to turn and rip. I was thinking I need to say bitch at the end or something
Oh, it’s very clear.
beautiful.
Thank you for stopping by.
:’ (
Oh goodness… That was absolutely heart breaking… :'(
Did it turn morbidly and cruelty at the end
Oh no… Just heart breaking at the realization. it took a minute for it to sink it. I just read it to his lordship. I wanted to see if he would get the end of it. He’s not into poetry. But he did get it. It was painfully beautiful writing.
It would have been cruel had you written his instant response.
You know I’m slow:). Teach me what you mean.
Give me a minute to write something.
His response
To My Love,
I found your letter
you said you were my heart.
Now I realize your words were
not for my own heart.
I misunderstood that I
am no longer your intended.
I feel foolish, rejected
my eyes fill with tears,
“Then we can finally be together…”
Oh!
-Amanuensis
Thank you. I am eager for real critique from people I respect. I just want it as good as it can be.
No problem. It’s just one opinion though:)